文段表达
从下面两个题目中任选一题,根据中文和英文提示,完成一篇不少于50词的文段写作。文中已给出内容不计入总词数。所给提示词语仅供选用。请不要写出你的校名和姓名。
题目①
假如你是李华,你们学校正在开展“安全月”宣传活动,倡议大家制作关于安全教育的主题海报,你们班交换生Peter给你发邮件询问相关事情。请用英语回复一封邮件,告诉他海报上交的时间,并分享你设计海报的一些想法。
提示词语: design,safety rule,careful,protect,picture
提示问题: When should you hand in the poster?
What would you like to share with Peter about designing the poster?
Dear Peter,
I'm glad to receive your email .
If there is anything more that I can help with, please let me know.
Yours,
Li Hua
Dear Peter,
I'm glad to receive your email. As it is required,you are supposed to hand in the poster before next Friday.
Being your close friend,I am extremely willing to share some ideas about designing the poster with you.First and foremost,the basic safety rules are of great importance,which should be included in your poster.In the second place,following the safety rules is so meaningful and crucial that you had better remind your readers of its significance and advise them to be careful both in and out of school.Last but by no means least,if I were you,I would add a few suggestions about safety awareness,considering that better safe than sorry.In addition,it is a good idea for you to draw a few pictures on your poster so as to make it more lively and acceptable.
If there is anything more that I can help with, please let me know.
Yours,
Li Hua
【解析】
这篇作文要求我们以李华的身份给Peter写一封邮件,告诉他关于制作关于安全教育的主题海报的相关事宜。由题目中给出的提示问题可知,短文中应包括以下内容:首先告诉Peter海报上交的时间;然后和他分享一些设计海报的想法。第二个内容应该是短文的主体。题目中并没有规定具体的写作内容,学生们应联系自己的实际生活,展开合理的想象,将这些内容补充完整后,用正确的英语表达出来,这是写作中的一个难点。短文应以一般现在时为主、第一、二人称来叙述。写作时应注意:首先要合理安排短文内容,叙述应有层次、有条理。可以使用一些表示先后顺序的词或短语,如First, Second, Last but not least等等。题目中给出的提示词应该在短文中用上。其次应注意文章的表达,英语句式的结构与汉语是不同的,因此不能根据汉语思维逐词翻译,应该从句式的整体考虑,先确定主干结构,然后添加修饰成分。为提升作文档次,应注意使用一些高级词汇、短语以及复合句、非谓语动词等复杂结构。同时语句之间使用恰当的连接成分,使文意上下连贯,表达流畅。
【点睛】
这是一篇优秀的作文,短文作者根据题目要求,给Peter写邮件,告诉他制作主题海报的一些事情。短文有以下几个优点:首先文章内容完整,结构清晰,符合题目要求。除题目中给出的开头和结尾,短文主要包括两个内容:第一段用一句话告诉Peter上交海报的时间;文章的中心和重点是放在了第二段上,这一段中作者和Peter分享了一些制作海报的想法。主要从四个方面进行阐述,内容非常详实,并使用了First and foremost, In the second place, Last but by no means least, In addition等短语,分清了这一段的层次,叙述非常有条理。其次短文中使用了正确的时态和人称,语法规范,用词准确,并使用了较复杂的句式结构,表现了作者较强的语言运用能力。短文中较好的句型有:Being your close friend,I am extremely willing to share some ideas about designing the poster with you.、In the second place,following the safety rules is so meaningful and crucial that you had better remind your readers of its significance and advise them to be careful both in and out of school、In addition,it is a good idea for you to draw a few pictures on your poster so as to make it more lively and acceptable.等等。